In both texts we are presented with different viewpoints of New Zealand. The author of the poem presents an image of what life is like being an immigrant in New Zealand. The author uses figurative language to create an image of their daily lives in New Zealand. “We have arrived in the North just as we arrived in the South before, to sleep above courtyards where immigrant children call out to their future which is our present.” In the text the Limestone, the author is describing their experience of travelling home to New Zealand. Figurative language is used again to present an image of experience but it has a different tone than the poem. “window seat so she can look out as the plane climbs up over Europe and watch it turn into a pristine place of forested hills and snow-topped mountains through which wind the rivers that are named for the old goddesses.'' The two authors use the same language feature but present a different tone. The author of the poem uses figurative language to highlight the harsh lives of immigrants whereas the author of the limestone uses figurative language to highlight the beauty of coming home and the experience of travelling.
Kia ora Ayman
ReplyDeleteWell done on your Unfamiliar Texts practice question. :)
To improve, here are some suggestions:
-Answer the question, using the exact keywords from the question (attitude to departure and arrival). You have offered a broad comparison. You need to narrow your focus and think carefully about what the question is asking you.
-Be specific. When you write there is a different tone, what different tone does each piece convey?
-Include a structure with paragraph breaks, even if the paragraphs are quite short. Intro, Body x 2, Conclusion
-Include additional language features. Don't forget you can always lean on the easy ones: "diction" "connotation" "verb" "imagery", etc. Don't forget author's PURPOSE and EFFECT on the reader (what mood is created?). STEEL or SEXXY are still in play here, even though it is the compare/contrast question. Spend some time studying language features so you can quickly identify what is what, rather than just guessing that there is figurative language somewhere in there. Show that you know your stuff. ;)
-Use authors' names instead of referring to 'the poem' vs 'the prose.' Last names only will do.
-You have attempted to answer the WHAT and the HOW, but the WHY is missing. Why does this matter? Connect to self, society, wider world.
Ka rawe, Ayman. Especially for a timed writing exercise!! Keep it up! :)